imitationsoul: (Like a bomb blast in your town)
御冷 ミァハ | Mihie MIACH ([personal profile] imitationsoul) wrote in [community profile] quietplace 2018-02-12 02:28 am (UTC)

Getting the carpet out of the way with first, it's obviously a story about a carpet that is sentient and unless there is a whole carpet culture with its own myths out there......

Well, let's say it's very specific.

The same goes for yours, it is very specific yet it evokes the feeling that there is some prior knowledge the reader needs to have before being able to understand it. That can be a deliberate narrative tool, but you said you're a beginner. So...

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